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some people think that mobile phones are harmful for their children , while others disagree . discuss both sides and give your opinion .

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With the increase in technology, use of mobiles has been so common among toddlers that people find it normal. Whereas there is
also
 a group of parents who are totally against the screen time for kids. In my opinion, it will be an advantage if children are using phones for learning purposes, which will be discussed in
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 essay. Nowadays with an increase in technology and fast-paced life, all parents want their teenager to be smart and intelligent. And the easiest way to lead learning in a fun way is through smart apps. Children can learn in a fast and interactive way via abundant sources available on the internet.
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, we have recently seen that during Covid pandemic when schools were shut down, the whole world followed an online teaching system for students where Mobile phones became teachers and only source of communication. In
such
 scenarios, we can definitely say cellphones have become a knowledge hub for the child. But there are still many people who think that giving electronic gadgets to young ones should not be encouraged. Parents have an opinion that too much exposure to vast technology can be harmful to the developing brain of babies. Too much screen time
also
 affects eyesight and thinking power by the high-frequency rays and high volume.
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earing and visible issues due to an increase in exposure to smart screens. As each coin has two sides, usage of phones by little minds can be harmful or useful, based on the usage. As per my opinion, I am in favour of using the phone by
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nfant. It will definitely help in increasing their knowledge and provide a vast information source which can lead to an intelligent adult mind.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • excessive screen time
  • health problems
  • eye strain
  • poor posture
  • disrupted sleep patterns
  • inappropriate content
  • addiction
  • reliance
  • impair
  • social skills
  • educational tools
  • digital literacy
  • mitigated
  • parental guidance
  • safeguards
  • responsible use
  • monitored
  • development
  • benefits
  • risks
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