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IT professionals from poorer companies are leaving their countries for developed countries for better-paying jobs. What are the possible problems of this and what solutions can you suggest to deal with this issue?

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It is the fact that vocational connected to
technology
 field move to the
countries
 where there are more opportunities than their state, where they live.
This
 essay will discuss the reasons and outcome that are assumed to overcome.
Firstly
, the
professinals
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professionals
 do not get the
package
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 line with
s
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ame skills in his country as he could get in the developed
countries
, which he can know through
surficing
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surfacing
surfing
 on the internet. In the age of
technology
 one
get
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 the information related to each and everything like what are the working hours,
w
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a
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eek off, public holidays, retirement benefit
then
 they find that those are less than that are offered in overseas.
for instance
 , if one
get
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 the package of $100 in other nation to assist to solve the bucks in software which require 5 hours and in
m
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otherland for the same work he gets $ 20,
then
 he
need
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 to think twice for the reason.
Secondly
, in developed
countries
 are
technology
 setter and not the
folower
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follower
flower
, means if one is there in the country in which
technology
 is innovated , has better chances to get more
succeed
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 in life.
for example
, In India 4G
technology
 entered after long , it started in
U
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S or other developed
countries
. The
goverment
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government
 should give support the startup which can develop the
technology
 before
than
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then
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 the developed
countries
 develop, It is not so that the students of our
countries
 are not capable enough to innovate but the thing is that they do not get means and
recognistion
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recognition
recognising
. To illustrate,
Mr.
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 Sundar
picchai
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Pichai
 who serves
the
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google is the person who is born and brought up in India , but he got the means to prove his
capablity
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capability
 in
U
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SA and not in India.
Besides
 that
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they should be offered packages along with the
life time
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lifetime
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 job security. there
are
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is
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n
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a
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umber of persons who love their country but due to lack of future
prospective
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perspective
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they have to leave. To conclude, the migration to the developed
countries
 can be reduced if they have given the security related to the job as well future.
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