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Education is not a luxury, but a basic human right and as such should be free for everyone irrespective of personal wealth. Do you agree or disagree?

#education #luxury #right #wealth
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 being is born with some fundamental
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 and these
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 should be entertained equally. Actually
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equality refers to the disadvantaged can enjoy the same life chances as everyone else. And
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 is one of the cornerstones of these
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. So, the
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 should be the same life chance for all whether one is wealthy or not, I strongly believe.
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 develops
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ndividual’s personality, unlocks full potential, and prepares individuals to participate in
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society.
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 ultimately thrives
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mankind. And it is our duty as
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uman being to foster mankind.
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 many international organizations have already acknowledged
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 as the fundamental human
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. The Universal Declaration of Human
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nited Nations is a very good example here. According to
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article 26 of the declaration,
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 is treated as fundamental
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 that it should be free for all, at least in the elementary level.
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 should be free for all regardless of
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ndividual’s financial affluence.
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, being the most crucial human
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, is extremely necessary for the exercise of all other human
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. It enlightens people that promote individual freedom and empowerment. Most importantly,
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 is a magical tool by which socially and economically marginalized individuals can lift themselves out of poverty and can act as
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ignified citizen. So,
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ilver bullet for combating against poverty and access to
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 is not prerogative of privileged circles of society. In fine, many people contend that
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ight to
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 or free
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 for all is not a realist idea. I strongly oppose their argument. A government, of course, cannot introduce an educational system
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, it takes money, and it takes time. But
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 enforce a government to build an inclusive quality
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 system over a period of time.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fundamental right
  • accessible
  • social mobility
  • personal and professional development
  • overall development
  • equality
  • social disparities
  • access
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