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WEALTHY COUNTRIES SHOULD ACCEPT MORE REFUGEES AND PROVIDE THEM WITH BASIC ASSISTANCE, SUCH AS FOOD AND HOUSING. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

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Nowadays, armed conflicts and wars are transversal problems. The consequence of them is the exit of an amazing number of
people
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 outside of their
countries
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 looking for a place where feeling alive: they are called
refugees
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. For
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 reason, there is no doubt that
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 crisis implies being solidary facing their neccessities from a global common perspective. On the one hand, it is a moral responsibilty to assist needy
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 because they are not only
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 who need help but
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 are they suffering because of the uncertainty of their own future. It is not fair to deny
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, who live in a horrible place surrounded by misery and ruins, a better life because we must be conscious we have only been luckier to not to be born there. For
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 reason, in my opinión,
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 should be provide of everything they could need by wealthy
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 as long as their state economy can support it.
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 it is argued that helping
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 cannot only consist in giving them basic assistance during an indefinite period of time, but
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 a way to make a living. If
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 have a source of incomes, the social spending Will decrease and
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 avoids generating differences in treatment with the local population who have to pay high taxes to support it.
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, there are those who believe that it is important to keep a stable ratio among foreign and local
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 in order to not to create a culture shock. Taking everything into account I strongly believe that wealthy
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 should accept more
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 if it can be suppported by their economy and the ratio of population, being distributed the number of
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 among the different developed
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 because it is a humanitarian obligation and, in a long term, I think it is possible to integrate them into a new society if the effort is made in a global sense.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Refugees
  • Asylum seekers
  • Humanitarian aid
  • Integration
  • Multiculturalism
  • Economic impact
  • Public services
  • International law
  • Conventions relating to the status of refugees
  • Labor market
  • Cultural enrichment
  • Burden-sharing
  • Resettlement programs
  • Host country
  • Border security
  • Comprehensive policy
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