Missions to explore space are hugely expensive, and there are problems on Earth which demand attention. The number of these missions needs to be reduced. Do you agree or disagree?

Discovering outer space through rockets and other means are costly and are
also
affecting the environment which
need
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attention to decrease various useless missions.I reckon,the more times the rockets are launched,the more it will
affects
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to
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the
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nature and human life and
also
result
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great
loss
of capital.
First
and foremost,from the day of
commence
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to the day of launch,
huge
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amount of money is required to complete the whole task while sometime the test could not get success.
This
means,if the test got failed
then
there is maximum chance of
loosing
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whole structure at a fraction of time resulting
loss
of huge money which indirectly affects
to
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the economy.
For instance
,many countries
loose
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their huge portion of
budget
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after getting unsuccessful launch causing significance change on the economic status of the government.
Thus
,only
necessary
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missions should be done so that great
loss
can be minimized.
Secondly
,the huge amount of gas is burnt while
launcing
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launching
a
space craft
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which directly or indirectly
impact
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towards
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the
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nature.The high amount of energy is required to leave the
earth
for rockets where maximum fuel is used resulting dust and dangerous gases as a drain which is harmful
for
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environment
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the environment
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as well as all the living creatures on
earth
.Because of
this
,
many
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rare flora and fauna are
in
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the verge of extinction.By reducing
such
missions,it can help to promote
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conserving those resources found on
earth
. In conclusion,doing
plethora
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of rocket launching programmes is
great
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loss
of income as huge capital should be allocated to complete a mission and the huge portion of
drain
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the drain
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in the form of smoke released from those are degrading the quality of life on
earth
.
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