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living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems

#country #language
It's believed that living in a
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 where you have to speak a foreign
language
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cause
 social and practical
problems
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This
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globalization and world migration are increasing dramatically. Living in another
country
 with its own
language
, other than your mother
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tongue
, can be a source for new opportunities, as well as a reason for new social challenges and complexities. Been a part of society you are living in it is a
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 demand of a human being. Nothing can be more
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important
 for integration into the new environment than speaking and understanding the
language
this
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 from my personal experience. When
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 was eighteen years old,
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 moved to another
country
 without any basic knowledge of the local
language
. In order to
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 my daily duties,
i
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 had started to learn the
language
 before
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 started any other activities,
such
 as working or studying a degree in a university. It
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took
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 me a
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 months to gain the initial gap and
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proceeded
proceed
 in my personal life path. The social
problems
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this
 new journey it is only
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one aspect of the
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living
 in a new
country
 without knowing the local
language
. Another aspect is a practical
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 when
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simple activities like order a pizza or ask how to get to
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 place can become a
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nightmare
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However
, the
problems
 below can be avoided by new different tools for
language
 learning that are available to everyone in any location. It's
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worth
wealth
 to invest some time and budget before moving to a new
country
 with its own
language
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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