in spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem?

Although
technology upgrades are applied in agriculture,
number
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of people dying due to starvation worldwide.
This
is
happending
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happening
because
population
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the population
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is rapidly burgeoning;
nevertheless
,
land
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the land
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is limited.
This
problem can be curbed with awareness among the people. On the one side, global
demand
for food substances is increasing due to rising population. The
land
for cultivation is limited which cannot be increased with the increasing
demand
. Not every
land
is suitable for agriculture,
land
with
speacial
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special
quality can
utilised
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for
this
. Technology can help to raise production up to a certain limit.
Thse
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The
These
increase in the population cause hike in
demand
of
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food products which cannot be fulfilled by limited
land
which eventually cause
death
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the death
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of people.
For instance
,
use
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the use
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of tractors in fields help to decrease labour but cannot increase production.
Hence
, advances cannot control the
demand
and increase
the
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production.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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