in spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem?

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technology upgrades are applied in agriculture,

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of people dying due to starvation worldwide.

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is rapidly burgeoning;

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is limited.

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problem can be curbed with awareness among the people. On the one side, global

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for food substances is increasing due to rising population. The

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for cultivation is limited which cannot be increased with the increasing

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. Technology can help to raise production up to a certain limit.

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food products which cannot be fulfilled by limited

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which eventually cause

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of people.

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of tractors in fields help to decrease labour but cannot increase production.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

142 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

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access to resources
climate change
natural disasters
political factors
economic factors
agricultural practices
infrastructure
transportation
population growth
education
knowledge
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in spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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Many things that used to be done in the home by hands are now being done by machines does this develoment has more advantages or disadvantaged.

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The floor plans below show the changes that were made to a house over a six-month period.

Traffic jam is increasing, what are causes and solution?