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You are due to give a presentation at work at the end of this week, but you are unwell and would like to postpone the presentation. Write a letter to your manager. In the letter, Describe the presentation Explain why you cannot deliver the presentation on the scheduled day Request a different date for your presentation You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear...,

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Dear Manager, I am writing to you to inform you of my unwell health and request to extend the due date for my upcoming presentation. The presentation that I am supposed to present is scheduled to be on Monday next week. It holds
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great importance for the company as it will be the initial point of introducing the employees
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 the new project, which
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 will be undertaking the following month. And I truly appreciate the responsibility and the trust that I have been bestowed upon for
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 significant meeting.
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, I am truly sorry to inform you that I might not be able to present the work on the decided date
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 my unwell health. For the past few weeks, I have been suffering from swine flu and as you are aware, I am on
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.
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 I am much better now, I
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 not have adequate time to prepare for it. Since there is still sufficient time left before the new project, I would appreciate it if you could move the meeting to the week following the scheduled one. In that way, it would enable me to adequately work on it. I again present you my apologies and will be looking
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 to your prompt response. Yours sincerely, Simran Kaur

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Task Response
Your letter effectively describes the presentation and explains the reason for your inability to present on the scheduled date. However, it could benefit from a bit more clarity on why postponing is necessary, especially in relation to the audience's preparedness for the project.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to vary your sentence structure a bit more to improve the overall flow of your letter. While the ideas are generally clear, some sentences could be combined or rephrased for a smoother reading experience.
Tone
You maintained a professional tone throughout the letter, which is very important in workplace communication.
Clarity
You provided a clear explanation for your situation, which is empathetic and understandable.
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