The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

In our contemporary life, it has always been a controversial issue over whether the government should impose international laws and alter forms of
transport
to the restrictions of purchasing automobiles and the operation of them
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British
in 1980. As far as I am concerned, I firmly support
this
belief and my reasons are outlined below. On the one hand, we may point out the indisputable fact that the
British
residents overused
cars
with different purposes, which emitted fume (CO2)
that is
one of the most common factors causing air pollution. According to a recent survey conducted by an American journalist, the quality of the atmosphere in
British
has been decreasing dramatically. To be more specific,
British
citizens chose to drive the car form to the supermarket in lieu of going
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foot
although
this
place is within walking distance of their houses.
This
study offers strong proof that our environment would be damaged seriously if the authorities did not manage the usage and property of
cars
. Another key rationale underpinning
this
view is that the overconsumption of automobiles means
the
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large number of
this
transport
appears on the streets.
This
situation resulted in the increase of accidents on roads and caused
traffic
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jam.
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more unexpected accidents from crashing
cars
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in Vietnam, which made many motorists were in line at peak time. In fact, a recently published study illustrates that if the policy had strict rules in driving the
cars
, there would not have been negative consequences like these above-mentioned instances.
On the other hand
, it is understandable why some people are of the fervent conviction that selling
cars
made more opportunities for people to earn living. Supporters of
such
a view would argue that these sellers would be out of work if international laws introduced to control car ownership and use.
Such
a scenario is exaggerated because
this
form of
transport
was much more up-to-date and convenient than the others. A prime example would be Australian inhabitants tended to replace motorcycles or bikes with
cars
on the roads. All things
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considered, I would
therefore
say that there are justifiable grounds for advocating the view that alternative forms of
transport
should be encouraged and imposing international laws would be easier for the government to manage the usage and owning the
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of residents.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliance on
  • regulate
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • public health
  • sustainable development
  • alternative forms of transport
  • car ownership
  • balancing benefits and drawbacks
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