Some people think that sports involving violence, such as boxing and martial arts, should be banned from TV as well as from international sporting competitions. To what extent do you agree?

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In today's world,

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activities are becoming more and more popular since it helps humans to forget about negative emotions and problems. It is believed by some part of the population that boxing and martial arts should be prohibited from TV and from competitions due to the violence. I agree with

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statements and will discuss possible reasons

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in the essay.

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with, on the one hand, the violation involved in these activities might have a harmful impact on the younger part of the spectators since they are the most

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is because of the fact that not only do youngsters got used to

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everything they see and reflect it in their lives but

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TV programs might stimulate children's interest

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, their preferences could be transformed under the influence of violation in

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and in the future they might choose to be criminals since they will not perceive it as something devastating.

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, recent research has shown that the majority of criminals in their childhood were interested

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in martial

arts and adore watching international sporting competitions.

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can provoke negative emotions and aggressiveness inside of the spectators

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their age and gender.

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is due to the fact that not only does the emergence of blood and wounds work as a stimulator for

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emotional state but

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the sound of screaming increase the level of stress.

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, humans are likely to become more

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nervous after watching boxing on the TV and they will feel anger inside of them.

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, one study has illustrated that those who like violent

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usually suffer from a significantly high level of aggressiveness. Eventually, to conclude, I completely agree with the claim that

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involving violence should be banned both from television channels and from international competitions since,

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, they

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be the cause why people become criminals and,

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, they damage humans' nervous system.

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combat sports
glorification of violence
impressionable audiences
cultural heritage
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media portrayal
regulatory measures
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It can be difficult for small local shops to compete with large supermarkets and with on-line shops. How does this affect local communities? What could be done to improve this situation?

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe that they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.