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Nowadays, it is more convenient and easier for people to travel to other countries. Is this a positive or negative development?

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There has been a remarkable development in
transportation
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 sector in recent years. Especially,
people
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 can be easily travelled abroad more than in the past. I believe
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 is a positive situation which promotes some developments in other subjects
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 as economic growth and cultural interplay. With the significant increase in airborne transportation for
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, the boundaries of the
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 almost disappeared which leads to economic growth in
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 all over the world. As the opportunity of seeing other
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 increases, more
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 tend to travel to different regions that they have not seen before.
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, notable growth in the economy is seen in most of the
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. Tourism is one of the most affected industries with the relevance of transportation. the
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 that welcome foreign tourists have significantly raised their tourism incomes.
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, another positive impact on the development of airway traffic can be considered as a social effect. If
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people
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 travel to other
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, they may feel more enthusiastic due to social improvement which comes from human nature.
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, discovering some places that attract
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 must be an amazing experience for every human being.
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, if governments ask dish producers to use printed and colourful bubble wraps, they can act as protective covers as well as eye-catching packages, which means that buyers will only have to throw away one wrapper. In conclusion, I think the positive development outweighs the negative one. The reasons behind the rise in waste production include consumerism and product packages, and possible solutions are laws to restrict household garbage as well as encouraging industries to use improved packaging.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Advancements in transportation
  • Cultural curiosity
  • Economic reasons
  • Globalization
  • Educational opportunities
  • Digital nomadism
  • Healthcare tourism
  • Tourism industry growth
  • Personal development
  • Interconnectedness
  • Higher living standards
  • Remote work
  • Broaden their horizons
  • Affordable travel
  • Medical treatments
  • Global perspective
  • Air travel options
  • Cuisines
  • Lifestyles
  • Job opportunities
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