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Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 believe that studying history is of no benefit in the current era in which we live. I totally disagree with the statement because our evolution is based on learning from past mistakes and our current advance
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 is built on the lessons learnt from our forebears. The main reason for
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 is that human evolution is possible only because
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 accumulate experience and
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 based on the historical events of their ancestors.
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 helps
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 make better decisions by reflecting on historical outcomes involving similar decisions and situations.
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, buildings are constructed in places that are free from floods and other natural disasters.
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 improve their life by learning from their mistakes and trying to avoid repeating them.
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, we are now experiencing a relatively peaceful world due to
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 learning from the past that wars are just too costly. Another important aspect is that future discoveries are always based on past
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. Take
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 the Internet.
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 discovery is really based upon telephony. In the past, we learned how to harness electricity which resulted in copper cables being to transmit analogue signals in the form of Morse code. Not long after humanity built on
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 to develop telephones. Later on, someone thought of the idea of carrying data over telephones.
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, the Internet came to fruition and it would not exist if it weren’t for the previous inventions. In conclusion, I think that learning from the past is essential to our lives because we can prevent past mistakes leading to
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 of mankind and we can make technological advancements based on past inventions.
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, I believe that history lessons should form a critical part of our education.
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