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Computers are being used more and more in education. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

#computers #education
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In the present world, it is considered as
technolgy
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technology
 plays a vital role in every aspect and
also
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 nowadays gadgets like laptops are being used frequently in
school
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the school
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 curriculum, but it has certain drawbacks.
This
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 essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages of
computers
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 and provide a logical conclusion. One of the principal advantages of utilizing electronic appliances in primary
schools
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 is self-reliance. Here, the current generation especially younger
students
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 are completely dependent on digital items like
computers
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 and tablets on their studies.
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, many primary
schools
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 making a trend to conduct teaching classes through these gadgets with the help of internet.
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, a majority of
students
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 gathering necessary information about their research and they are self-dependent to use these appliances in their course.
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, many countries are conducting online classes to their
students
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 with the help of
computers
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 and the internet after a pandemic. Despite these advantages, few individuals who are using
these device
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 in
schools
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 are losing face to face interaction. Currently, technology is becoming
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a drawback in student's education and in fitness level. They cannot communicate personally with other schoolmates or professors and resolves their queries regarding any assignments.
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, many secondary school
students
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 making
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misuse of
this
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 device which effecting their grades in
there
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 curriculum and suffering from
health related
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 issues
such
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 as eye vision and back problems.
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, In
India
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 a lot of
students
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 who
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 attending online classes are not concentrating or
self focused
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self-focused
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 and wasting their precious time while
studing
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studying
 like surfing on
internet
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the internet
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. In Conclusion,
although
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 personal interaction is missing in school education have certain negative effects, it has extremely
benefits
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 as well like student's self-determination and systematic approach towards
computers
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 and provides
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essiential
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essential
 data about their course. I personally believe that these benefits of using laptops frequently in
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outweights
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outweighs
 the disadvantages.
Submitted by Kishor on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Interactive learning tools
  • 2. Multimedia presentations
  • 3. Online resources
  • 4. Distance learning
  • 5. Remote areas
  • 6. Digital literacy
  • 7. Problem-solving
  • 8. Critical thinking
  • 9. Technology-driven world
  • 10. Digital textbooks
  • 11. Administrative tasks
  • 12. Cost-effective
  • 13. Distraction
  • 14. Social media
  • 15. Over-reliance
  • 16. Traditional skills
  • 17. Handwriting
  • 18. Face-to-face communication
  • 19. Technical problems
  • 20. Digital divide
  • 21. Inequality
  • 22. Educational opportunities
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