The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with the problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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obesity cases dramatically increases every year and
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is becoming an issue for the health agencies since they have to deal with
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all the other occurring problems . As a solution to
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some
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believe that sports education should be introduced since the early years in
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. I totally agree with the suggestion and I believe that
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development could be beneficial for the future of the countries around the world .
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curriculum they could create a routine to exercises
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or weekly basis . The advantage of
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feel more confident since sadly , nowadays bullying is very popular among students and the target are generally overweight colleagues .
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, is been confirmed in a recent study carried out by the London University that more than 30 % of the heavyweight students dropped out of
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because they could not cope with the stress created by the bullying activities . To continue , these
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other complications related to their obesity . The reduction of the cases would
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relieve the pressure of the medical staff which has to deal with these problems . Low self-esteem could be one trigger
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because obese
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do not consider themselves attractive .
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the person could hold other skills , sadly nowadays society tends to judge
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by their appearance and fit individuals seems to be more engaging .
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, their social life could suffer for the particular reason that their condition limits them to certain activities .
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who's weight is below 80 kg for security purposes . To conclude , in my
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the idea of including sports classes in
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education could be a positive development for the young generation because in
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way they could unknowingly create a long term routine which is demonstrated to be an important factor for the general health .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity rates
  • health care system
  • physical education
  • instill
  • long term
  • raise awareness
  • healthier lifestyle choices
  • nutritional education
  • active transport
  • quality of instruction
  • facilities and equipment
  • diet control initiatives
  • community sports programs
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