It is common for people to travel long distances for work and study. Some argue that longer commute times negatively affect people while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is becoming increasingly widespread that individuals
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a long
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to and from the workplace and school. While some
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argue that
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phenomenon causes a lot of detrimental effects on
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’s lives, others have the opposite views. I think it has some benefits for both
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and society. On the one hand, some
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discuss that commuting for a
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distance
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leads to adverse impacts on
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’s family relations and personal health.
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,
people
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spend less
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communicating and getting along with their family members due to the tiredness of long commutes.
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, they have to leave home very early and arrive home very late so that they do not have enough
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to accompany their families.
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,
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for a long
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to
work
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and study makes
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to
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have some health problems
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as depression and obesity because they have to sit for a long
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and it brings them more pressures.
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, some claim that
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distance
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traveling
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would contribute to the success of both individuals and
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society.
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,
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distance
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commuters have more options to study or
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.
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,
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who live in
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rural area could
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in
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big city which enable them to earn more money.
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, their quality of life has risen significantly that they could afford their mortgage and basic foods easily.
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, there are more employment opportunities in the society which give
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lots of chances to choose what they want to do and help them to get a decent job.
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, Social
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force will be increase because the way
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travel becomes more convenient. In the past, factories in remote areas often lacked
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because of inconvenient transportation. As
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distance
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commuting becomes more and more common,
people
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are more willing to
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in those areas. In conclusion,
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long
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time
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commuting brings some negative effects on
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, but these can be tackled with some methods. I strongly support that it is helpful for personal and social development.
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