With the pressures on today's young people to succeed academically, some people believe that non-academic subjects at school (eg: physical education and cookery) should be removed from the syllabus so that children can concentrate wholly on academic subjects. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, many young generations are forced to fulfill many kind of pressures from the society, especially academic things and
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, many of them are asked to be succeed academically. Linking Words
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essay, I will explain the reasons why I do not agree with that notion as well as provide the plausible conclusion regarding that matter.
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. On top of that, it can be a way to prevent them from commiting a suicide because of the heavy burden that they have. Use synonyms
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, many Japanish students commit suicide every year, it accounted for about 25% of the death rate in a year. The reason why they did that, it is because the pressure on academic things which is very hard to accomplish, and they do not have a time to chill. Linking Words
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, it is better to have those chilling activities as Linking Words
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, since it helps the pupils to refresh their mind.
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Secondly
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bring to develop our soft skill. As we have known, the academic achievement is not marked only by the score that they get after the tests, but Use synonyms
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the social skill that they made in the way they finish every task. Without a communication skill, a good mark is never been achieved. It is because the student will transform into an arrogant and a selfish person, which may lead to lower their performance at Linking Words
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For instance
: a student, who always has a highest score in the test and project, may find difficulties in finishing team work projects. Linking Words
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, as the education level is getting higher, there will be many project tasks, and if he never changes, he will fail in some Linking Words
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, in the end, in my personal belief, I think, I disagree with the idea of eliminating the non-academic Linking Words
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