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Fast food is now universally in most countries and is becoming increasingly popular. Some feel that this is a positive trend, while others do not. What are your opinions in this??

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 the trend of frozen and ready to eat meals are booming nowadays in the world ,while others still believe that homemade
food
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 is the best. I will discuss both the view and my opinion on
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 essay.
To begin
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 with ,there are a lot of
people
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 who believe that rising fast
food
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 industry made peoples life easy , they
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 think that ready-made
food
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 save their
time
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 of cooking and they can use that
time
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 in some productive work.For instinct,the corporate women do not have
time
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 to cook ,so they buy
food
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 from Mc Donal's.so its
time
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 saving,
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 frozen
food
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 and junk
food
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 are accessible in each and every corner of the world.Another reason is that it is cheap
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 the fresh
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 .The frozen sandwich is available in the market just for $5, which save
people
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time
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 and cooking preparation .
On the other hand
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 ,there are many think that frozen and junk
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 are unhealthy and one should avoid a packed meal. they argue that eating fast
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 every day is not good for the human body, there are many health risks associated with that. For example, eating everyday pizza and burger can lead to obesity or heart disease. so
people
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 should eat healthy and homemade
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.
In addition
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 , frozen and fast
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 is made up of expired ingredient ,and they are not rich in nutrition too.
for example
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, the burger does not contain lots of calories but it does not contain any essential protein and vitamins.it is better to prepare a meal at home and take it to the workplace. To conclude , fast
food
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 are popular ,but it is unhealthy to eat every day, In my opinion eating fresh
food
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 is better than fast
food
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,
people
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 should
also
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 think before buying it as a meal.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Obesity epidemic
  • Processed foods
  • Nutritional value
  • Chronic diseases
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Economic impact
  • Job creation
  • Environmental degradation
  • Sustainability
  • Dietary habits
  • Consumerism
  • Mass production
  • Public health
  • Health-conscious
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