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The internet means people do not need to travel to foreign countries to understand how others live. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#internet #people #travel #countries
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Some
people
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 believe that with the internet, it is no longer necessary for
people
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 to
travel
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 to understand foreign cultures. I completely disagree with
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 view because
traveling
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 is the only way for
people
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 to make authentic, international friendships and
taste
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 local foods.
People
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 still need to
travel
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 to other countries in order to make
friends
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 abroad and learn about their culture. When someone travels abroad, they normally make
friends
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 with language teachers, tour guides and friendly locals at hotels and bars. Many of these friendships result in invitations to weddings, parties and cultural festivals that are special to the
people
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 who live there.
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, when I went to Mexico, I became
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 with a local university student who invited me to her cousin’s elaborate wedding in Mexico City. If I had not
traveled
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 to Mexico, I would not have learned about the “
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Torna Boda
”, the exciting
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 that starts after many of the guests go home.
Traveling
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 abroad is
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 necessary if
people
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 want to
taste
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 local foods that are made by the
people
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 who live there. When
people
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 go to other countries, eating
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local delicacies is often the best way to learn about the place.
People
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 learn about uniquely grown vegetables and fruits and get a
taste
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 of new seasonings and herbs.
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, in Chile, many visitors can get a
taste
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 of “pebre”, a unique appetizer that starts almost every meal in that country. If
people
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 do not actually
travel
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 to
this
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 country, they could never eat
this
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 dish by an actual Chilean who has sourced local ingredients and cooked it expertly. In conclusion, I completely disagree that
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 no longer have to
travel
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 to
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 new cultures because they still need to make
friends
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 abroad and eat authentic meals in order to truly experience them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global connectivity
  • virtually explore
  • multicultural experiences
  • cross-cultural understanding
  • cultural immersion
  • online resources
  • digital age
  • cultural differences
  • language barriers
  • physical distance
  • perspective
  • cultural appreciation
  • educational value
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