Some people believe that celebrating personal events is a waste of money. Others feel that these celebrations play an important role in the lives of individuals and in society as a whole. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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importance of celebrating functions in one's life. Some believe that celebration can only lead to

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wastage whereas another group of thinkers support stating enjoyment is of utmost importance in an individuals life and in the social aspect.

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, both has its own pros and cons.

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, before commenting on my decision, both the opinions would be discussed. Examining the former opinion, the primary thought the supporters would put forward is one should preserve their hard-earned

money

for the betterment of future rather than spending it on the occasions which can just lead to temporary happiness.

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, no matter how grand the event is celebrated, people are sure to point out mistakes. So why to spend so much unnecessarily for others who are ultimately ungrateful.

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scenarios like pandemic they should be more

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that celebrations create memories because of

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everyone should prefer to cherish these moments

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feel having big fat weddings can make a huge difference in

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society.

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others.

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wedding celebration and eventually proving to be socially more powerful. To conclude and give my opinion, I would say that celebrating any occasions in life with lesser expenditure is the most ideal way to deal with any situation. In a big picture,

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future without having any stress for their retirement.

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