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Some people think that international news is more important than local news. Others argue that local news is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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In recent decades, globalization causes some
people
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 to believe that international
news
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 is more significant than a domestic
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.
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, others hold the opinion on the opposite side. In
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 essay, I will elaborate on both sides and give my own viewpoint on
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 issue. On the
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 hand,
people
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 arguing in favour of international
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, generally, claim that in today’s developing generation more and more individuals will invest in some foreign companies or real estate abroad. The international messages always relate to the price of the stock, the profit of those companies, the house price of that area and so on, so they always care for the information around the world as those reports can help them to make decisions for avoiding risk. Meanwhile, in recent year, because the global pandemic is a potential risk for their business, the global
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 which reports the condition of COVID 19 will support them to adjust their investment strategy timely.
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, another group of
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 hold the opposite opinion, and they believe that local
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 can provide some latest alert,
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 as the natural disasters, which is more related to our daily life than the international
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 from a safety aspect. As we all know, due to the technology development, the pre-warning system is very advanced now, so the local
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 can help us to get the warning of natural hazard 10 or 20 seconds in advance, which is vital for
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.
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 typical example is that in China, local
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 about COVID-19 helps all citizens to prevent the virus efficiently.
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 is why many
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 prefer watching regional
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. In conclusion, even though both international and regional
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 is significant, in my point of view, I still believe that the native message is more crucial than the global
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 as it is more related to our daily life.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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