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Fewer people today visit museums than in the past. Why is this? What can be done to encourage more people to visit museums in the future?

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İt is often said that the minority of
people
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 tend to come to
museums
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 compared to years ago in today's complex society. While there will
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 be some prime reasons for
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 trend, societies can take steps to draw individuals' attention towards
museums
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 in the near future. The foremost reason why very few
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 come to see
museums
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 nowadays is that everyone has an access to the internet which allow
people
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 to visit
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 online. It is obvious the internet has considerably become widespread in a technologically progressed and globalized world.
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 to say, humans can easily go online and reach any favourite
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art work
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 at any time.
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, it is available to find any kind of
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 patterns' pictures or photos on the internet.
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, there are several measures that government bodies, as well as communities, could take to tackle these hurdles. The main solution might be considered that if the entrance fee in a museum is free of charge
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 some days of the week,
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 the vast majority of
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 will be
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 for sure. Because there are numerous
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 who are really into
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 and willing to come to
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. A
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 measure is that diverse competitions can be held by the board of
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the museum
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.
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, schoolchildren can be involved
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 competitions
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painting
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 a picture and so on. To conclude, various measures can be taken to tackle the problems that are certain to arise as few
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 go to
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. It is expected that governments will prepare for projects in order to attract nations to
museums
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.
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