Nowadays people are affected by social media and internet. Is it a good or bad trend in your opinion? Explain it by giving your own examples.

Nowadays,
people
are tend
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to interact with modern technology because of its convenience and entertainment
although
it benefits human's needs
however
it's still give
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it still gives
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a huge
impacts
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impact
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on the users . In my opinion,social
media
and
internet
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the internet
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contribute both good and bad side to everybody. As we know,as the technology is developing fast,social
media
and
internet
were
borned
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born
and we can't deny that we can live without
internet
because there
are
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is
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a huge vast of essential information for
eveyone
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everyone
to access to study or research.
Moreover
,
for
example
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they can have entertainment
such
as movie
drammas
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dramas
drama
,music,online games in their free time.
However
,too much
on
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depending on the
internet
could lead to addicted which online game addicted has become a big
problems
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problem
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for our children.
Also
,online shopping can be fraud so it is untrustworthy for some
people
to do
online
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the online
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transaction and seem to be annoying for everyone
wish
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to have online
bussinesses
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businesses
. On the other side,social
media
is highly useful in term of communicating in a convenient way.Plus,you can find more friends through social
media
or do
bussinesses
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businesses
such
as clothes selling.
Hence
,
people
also
can entertain by chatting with their friends or family whenever they are not convenient to meet.For examples,there are some famous social
media
apps like Instagram,Facebook and Whatsaap,...
eventhough
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even though
it is interesting to have a free connection between
people
and
people
, there a
lot
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fake accounts created to cheat
guilible
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gullible
people
or influenced bad behaviour to children that's why we must have a right conscious to indicate what is true or false . In conclusion,social
media
and
internet
may have benefited
people
like modernity and
convience
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convenience
however
it is good that if you have good awareness to
forseen
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foreseen
those unwanted things like fraud or bad contents
thus
you can have a
safely
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access to the
internet
.
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