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There are many benefits for young people who travel to other countries. Do you agree or disagree?

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These days , in our society we can observe that majority of youngsters prefer to
travel
 to other countries for different purposes.There has been much discussion revolving around
this
 trend of whether travelling to a foreign
country
 has any merits or not in a teenagers life. Some
people
 think that it has many positive impacts on youngsters life. I strongly support
this
 idea and in
this
 essay, I will support my opinion with example.
Firstly
, going abroad enhance young
people
 to acquire knowledge regarding new
country
 -its cultural , social and traditional differences.For taking young students who
travel
 for higher studies, have an opportunity to mingle with
people
 from different parts of the world;
as a result
 ,they learn to cope up with different situations in their forthcoming life.
Thus
, it is better for young children to go on
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travel
 to a different
country
. Another reason why I agree with travelling abroad is that a large number of young
people
 become more independent if they apart from their home and parents.
For instance
, in order to fulfil their daily bread, they are ready to do jobs and earn for themselves.
This
 is a positive impact that once they become adult they value the pleasure of earning for their needs.
Furthermore
 , they learn to manage their pocket according to their size.
On the other hand
, there is an argument that travelling to a new
country
 has no benefit or young
people
.They claim that language is a big barrier for the new migrants and it may cause some negative effect on young peoples' lives.
However
 , good preparation and learning can resolve
this
 issue. In conclusion,
although
 there is a common argument regarding the language barrier , I believe it is
such
 a pitty issue that can be eliminated easily. Personally, I believe
travel
 to a new
country
 will be a benefit for the young children in many ways as discussed above .
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