some people advocate death penalty for those who committed violent crimes. Others say that capital punishment is unacceptable in contemporary society Describe advantages and disadvantages of death penalty and give your opinion?

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that the punishment should be crucial to the prisoner , others thought it should be not and should be limited to community service, or stay in jail all
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to be death for his crime . we will
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advantage and disadvantage of
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think about the terrible doing that they make it ,and reform them to valid action towards society . The punishment varies from
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other
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them in works that serve society . In my opinion no matters the crimes that the human
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it no one should be killed, we can employ them in action that could help both of us .
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Advocates
  • Capital punishment
  • Contemporary society
  • Violent crimes
  • Deterrence
  • Retribution
  • Cost-effectiveness
  • Imprisonment
  • Innocent
  • Unethical
  • Inhumane
  • Misuse
  • Legal systems
  • Heinous crimes
  • Closure
  • Moral concerns
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