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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The fact that a person settling in a foreign country needs to speak their
language
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 can raise social interaction issues and real-life hardships. I fully agree with
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 statement and in
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 essay, I will demonstrate how the linguistic barrier causes problems.
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, individuals trying to build a life in a foreign society can face many practical problems, namely interpersonal issues, in their day-to-day lives.
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, they are unable to make a (comprehend) a conversation
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 misinterpretation of their meaning which
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 leads to cultural conflicts. The result would be the exclusion of the foreigners from the target society (The result would be the foreigners being excluded from the target society).
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, calling someone by their first name is a way to show friendliness and warmth in Vietnam but it is considered disrespectful in the Japanese culture.
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, many international students try to keep their cultural heritage acts, like
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 greetings to a minimum, so as not to irritate (offend) their classmates and avoid unwanted arguments. Another issue is the incompetence in completing simple daily tasks. To explain
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, verbal limitations can hinder outsiders' ability to perform social tasks efficiently.
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,
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 limitations can create issues for international students in their studies or foreign workers in terms of the complexities of essential services,
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 as healthcare, education, and legal assistance.
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,
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 problem can be overcome by effectively studying (practising) the
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 of the country they are living in and using translation apps. In conclusion, I believe most people have to deal with linguistic problems following moving to a new country
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 their lack of ability (incapacity) to speak in their
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 and understand situations,
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, it is advisable to try to learn the local
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 fully as to ease the difficulties of the circumstances.

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grammar
Make sure to maintain parallel structures in your sentences and avoid minor grammatical errors. For example, instead of "make a (comprehend) a conversation", use "comprehend a conversation" or "make a conversation".
coherence
Ensure consistency in terminology. The essay sometimes uses multiple terms interchangeably (e.g. 'linguistic barrier', 'verbal limitations'), which can disrupt the flow and overall coherence.
structure
Clear introduction and conclusion that provide a logical start and end to the essay.
examples
The examples given are relevant and help to illustrate the main points effectively.
task achievement
The essay addresses the prompt comprehensively and provides well-rounded arguments for the points discussed.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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