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In many workplaces, online communication is getting more common than meeting face to face. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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The employee is choosing online platforms in many workplaces rather than face to face interaction I believe that virtual communication give birth to many bad impacts like bad internet connection dinner the whole working process but its advantages outweigh the disadvantages
such
 as employee should not worry about the terrible expenditure if they
work
 online and it saves
the
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time
 on go to and from
work
 and spend
time
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To begin
 with, an employee made their life comfortable with the help of technology e-train meeting save the spending of a worker like free for the bus ticket and pay for
taxi
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,if there is a long distance in workplace and money for having lunch
however
 that worker who works by the internet should not worry about these along with
this
 working online save
time
 and make life much easier
for example
 in corona pandemic people avoid physical interaction and able to do
work
 from home
this
 is because of online technology which
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 it was both and expect
time
 they can spend with their family and made a good relationship with the help of online communication.
On the contrary
,
this
 development has some bad impacts like worker need food connection of internet with their coworker if there is a bad network it can delay whole working process
however
 its advantages cannot be ignored as meeting room need a large space with the online platform organiser do not need to worry about the meeting rooms it saves the space of
work
 field. To conclude, the virtual meeting is so convenient and
time
 saver for employees and flexible working hours to do
work
 from everywhere and make a better relationship with their colleagues
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