Too much is spent on looking after repairing old buildings. Do you agree or disagree?

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a controversial topic whether an ancient historical property should be renovated or not as it costs a huge amount of fund. I have a mixed notion about the statement.
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sides with some relevant examples. On the one hand, heritage buildings are of great importance as these are the symbols of the culture and olden memories of any country.
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the government and citizens are equally responsible to make efforts to keep their golden property safe and repaired.
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Mahal, a popular tourist place in India, is
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a famous historical monument and one of the seven wonders, a symbol of
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of the Mughal Emperor Akbar and her beloved wife queen Jodha. The state spent
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portion of money on regular basis just to ensure that it has not lost its originality and always resembles the same as it was in the old times. On the flip side, some people argue that spending
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amount on repairing the old buildings is
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wastage of public fund.
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instance, If the property is too old and badly damaged that it cannot be repaired or after repairing
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the same does not
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like what it was before,
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all is vain.
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of fixing old
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the government should utilise that money for the betterment of the nation.
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, by constructing new educational institutes, medical centres the state can benefit
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all residents as well as the country. To recapitulate, after discussing both the points, I strongly advocate that the golden heritage should be protected and repaired unless the same shows its uniqueness and importance.
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, the other constructions are equally significant for a nation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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