The rising levels of congestion and air pollution found in most of the world cities can be attributed directly to the rapidly increasing number of private cars in use. In order to reverse this decline in quality of life in cities, attempts must be made to encourage people to use their cars less and public transport more. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In
this
day and age, more and more contemporary attention has been placed on whether or not
car
ownership should be discouraged and the government should inspire people to utilize public transport much more. I myself believe that
this
is a good option to improve the air quality and relieve
traffic
congestion in many cities;
however
, at the same
time
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there is much that can be done to contribute to better living conditions in big cities.
First
, it is clear that calling upon
car
users to take advantages of
public
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transportation system would lead to a reduction
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jams and
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environment. As a matter of fact, when alternative means of transport are available, cheaper and convenient enough, commuters
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as a result
may prefer using it, which could bring about
less
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cars on the road and
also
less
car
exhaust gases. Singapore,
for instance
, is one of the cleanest countries in the world with
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traffic
thanks to its excellent public transportation system.
However
,
this
measure alone is unlikely to have a major impact on the quality of life Another feasible approach is that
government
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should enact strict laws on cars import activities and
car
usage. To be more specific, when taxing cars at the point of purchase or annually through
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would make them more expensive, causing a shrink in the number of buyers.
In addition
to that, several kinds of
car
use,
such
as for short journeys, within packed cities can be discouraged through road pricing schemes and high parking ticket price. By doing these,
traffic
congestion could be relived and air pollutants including
car
emissions
also
diminish substantially. In conclusion, with all the reasons mentioned above, I partly lean on the idea of
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residents to commute by public transport to reduce
car
use because there are several drastic ways to better both
traffic
and environment conditions.
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