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Some people believe that products should be made to last as long as possible. Others think that products should be as cheap as possible. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Over the
last
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 few decades, there has been a public debate over the quality and price of
things
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. While it is believed that
products
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 should be cheap to be affordable for poor
people
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, I would argue that they need to be manufactured to
last
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 as long as possible. On the one hand,
products
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 should be produced so as to be economically suitable for all individuals since
poor
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 nation in
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developing countries should be able to buy
things
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 they need. In fact, not all nations provide their inhabitants with enough money to exist and,
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, it must be the number of produced
things
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 which can be affordable for them.
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,
people
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 in Africa suffer
poverty
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 and low-cost goods, namely clothes or kitchen equipment, will be the most beneficial solution for them.
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, if the manufacture of low-priced production is ceased, there will be not enough
things
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 for poor
people
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 to live with.
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, despite the benefit of reasonable prices, I consider that goods should be manufactured to be lasting since they may prevent the spread of overconsumption. Nowadays, in the era of trend addicted buying, an increasing number of
people
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 tend to change low-quality
products
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, especially clothes, which can be harmful to the ecosystem as they are not recycled. If the clothes are produced to
last
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 as long as possible, the issue of overconsumption and polluting the environment may disappear. Eventually, individuals should use long-term
products
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 to avert the spread of waste. In conclusion, the world has faced the issue of the quality and price of
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.
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,
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 it is vital to provide needy
people
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 with cheap goods, they should be manufactured to be lasting in order to prevent the contamination of the environment which can be caused by overconsumption.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • durability
  • sustainability
  • longevity
  • affordability
  • consumerism
  • waste
  • environmental impact
  • value for money
  • customer satisfaction
  • brand loyalty
  • consumption
  • economic growth
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