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Countries should produce the food that their population eats, and import as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons, examples to your answer.

In today's era,
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 scarcity is one of the major concern. Nations shall reckon to pay attention to public demand for
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 production and limit their imports. It is,
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, imperative that every state drafts its own plans for self-sufficiency in crop raising. I firmly believe that producing many kinds of
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 is an inevitable effort in terms of ensuring
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food
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 security.In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall expound my thoughts in detail.
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,the outcome of increased dependency on imported eatables will be
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. It is, because, these foreign products include transportation costs, taxation and other charges that eventually increase the
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 price. To tackle
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 problem, a government should allocate more budgets to improve national production by maximising the collaboration of university and research laboratory.
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, in Auckland, the ministry had invested a huge amount in cultivating the
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 plants which indeed contributed
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 their economical growth.
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, improving the agricultural sector impacts positively on the country's economy. It creates jobs opportunities for the unemployed and helps in eradicating poverty. If crops are produced in surplus, it increases exports.
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 increases the brand image of the country in the international arena owing to increased stability. If we can produce nutritious
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 in a self-sustained manner, we will be building a healthy community.
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 will help us to become a superpower in the competitive world market. To put it in a nutshell,
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 security is indeed a necessity at
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 hour. It is a sign of an improved economy and
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 a solution for many chronic problems within a country.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-sufficiency
  • trade dependency
  • food security
  • sustainable agriculture
  • local economies
  • carbon footprint
  • supply chain
  • food miles
  • agricultural sector
  • domestic production
  • import substitution
  • food sovereignty
  • global supply chains
  • trade imbalances
  • food standards
  • economic resilience
  • biodiversity
  • cultural heritage
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