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The best way to understand other culture is to work for multinational company. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Working in multinational organizations Is the most prominent approach to get more knowledge about other
cultures
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 And languages. While
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company
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 provides an opportunity to work with people from various
culture
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, I would argue that
this
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 is not necessarily the best way to learn about other
cultures
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. On the one hand, there are numerous reasons which support to learn about different
cultures
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 by working in a multinational
company
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.
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 with, much multinational organization have mixed their employees who belong to other
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.
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, colleagues have a chance to interact with various
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 person.
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, in order to communicate with each other and know more about their traditions they can be learnt the alien
language
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.
On the other hand
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, learning about a new
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 in working with a multinational
company
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 cannot suitable all time. The foremost reason is that people who work in those organisations but their role in a
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 cannot be allowed them to work with different speaking
language
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 person.
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, there are various employees we cannot get chance to speak another
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 for communication because their position in a
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 has only followed the senior orders.
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, travelling is the best way to know about new
cultures
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. Owing to
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 Individuals could have a chance to learn and know about another
language
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 while they will travel to foreign countries. A recent study is proved that many Indians speak the English
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 without learning at school. In conclusion,
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 learning different
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 by working in a multinational organization is considered beneficial to some extent, it seems to me people could get vast knowledge about a new
culture
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 through travelling.
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