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Some people think that children should be taught to be competitive in school others However say that cooperation and team working skills are more important. Discuss both the points and give your opinion

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It seems that these days many education facilities
such
 as public schools, private schools and private academy, are pushing their pupils to study harder than others so that they can be superior to their competitors.
On the other hand
, some experts insist that learning how to work is more important than just simply being competitive. In
this
 essay, I am going to compare these two opinions and add my opinion. On the one hand, it is logical for some people to make their
students
 be competitive. Certainly, to win in any competition would be beneficial for many
students
.
For example
, if they want to enter a prestigious university, it must be helpful to get higher grades. By being taught how to be like that, the
students
 could be competitive even after their graduation.
On the other hand
, if the education is focused on the way to cooperate with their colleagues rather than to win, I think they tend to sympathize with their friends rather than to be over them.
Instead
 of recognizing their friends as competitors and being on pins and needles due to the worries from the severe competitions, they will be harmonized by them as coworkers. To sum up, I believe that to educate
students
 to be with their classmates as their coworkers rather than their competitors will be much more beneficial to many
students
.
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