Many people choose to work or live abroad because of the higher standards of living they can find outside their home country. Do you think this brings more advantages or disadvantages to the people who follow this path?

Nowadays, some people often migrate to developed
countries
in order to achieve a better quality of
life
. I believe
this
trend has several positive aspects since developing
countries
usually do not have excellent living conditions.
To begin
with, young people find better career
opertunities
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opportunities

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in foreign
countries
compare to their home. The main reason behind
this
is, poor
countries
have
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unemployment

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umemployment
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an umemployment

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crisis among graduates due to
lack
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of job opportunities.
Thus
, one has to select a job which they do not like or land for
an
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employment with
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salary.
As a result
, most of the graduates in developing
countried
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countries

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such
as India, Sri Lanka, Vietnam and so on are becoming depressed after
the
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graduation and eager to find well-paid jobs in rich
countries
. Another compelling reason is the comfortable
life style
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lifestyle

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that
offer
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in rich nations. It is a matter of fact that the developing
countreis
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countries

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have unreasonably high
prizes
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prices

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for vehicles, homes and healthcare facilities.
On the other hand
, the people who live in rich nations have to bear comparatively
less
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fewer

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expenses for basic needs. For
instancs
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instance
instances

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, healthcare cost for Australian citizens and
permenant
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permanent

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residence is zero. Here, all the expenses are covered by the government since the authorities have enough money to take care of their residences. Not only expenses but
also
these
countries
have
high
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highly

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skilled doctors and nurses that develop the physical and mental health of the society. In conclusion, the current trend of finding new destinations to
achive
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achieve

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better
life
standards have many
obviuos
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obvious

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merits
such
as jobs with higher payments and comfortable living
optunities
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opportunities

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.
Hence
, one can have a luxury
life style
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lifestyle

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by
mooving
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moving
removing

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away from the native country.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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