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Many people choose to work or live abroad because of the higher standards of living they can find outside their home country. Do you think this brings more advantages or disadvantages to the people who follow this path?

Nowadays, some people often migrate to developed
countries
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 in order to achieve a better quality of
life
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. I believe
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 trend has several positive aspects since developing
countries
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 usually do not have excellent living conditions.
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 with, young people find better career
opertunities
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opportunities
 in foreign
countries
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 compare to their home. The main reason behind
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 is, poor
countries
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 have
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unemployment
umemployment
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 crisis among graduates due to
lack
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a lack
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 of job opportunities.
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, one has to select a job which they do not like or land for
an
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employment with
low
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a low
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 salary.
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, most of the graduates in developing
countried
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countries
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 as India, Sri Lanka, Vietnam and so on are becoming depressed after
the
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apply
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graduation and eager to find well-paid jobs in rich
countries
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. Another compelling reason is the comfortable
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life style
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lifestyle
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 that
offer
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 in rich nations. It is a matter of fact that the developing
countreis
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countries
 have unreasonably high
prizes
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prices
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 for vehicles, homes and healthcare facilities.
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, the people who live in rich nations have to bear comparatively
less
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 expenses for basic needs. For
instancs
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instance
instances
, healthcare cost for Australian citizens and
permenant
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permanent
 residence is zero. Here, all the expenses are covered by the government since the authorities have enough money to take care of their residences. Not only expenses but
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 these
countries
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 have
high
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highly
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 skilled doctors and nurses that develop the physical and mental health of the society. In conclusion, the current trend of finding new destinations to
achive
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achieve
 better
life
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 standards have many
obviuos
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obvious
 merits
such
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 as jobs with higher payments and comfortable living
optunities
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opportunities
.
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, one can have a luxury
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life style
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lifestyle
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 by
mooving
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moving
removing
 away from the native country.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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