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Students should choose a university major that prepares them for a high-paying careers. To what extent do you agree with the statement.

#students #university #careers
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Deciding what school or
university
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 is one of the hardest things to do as a student, thinking of what major you will get, either to get a better
career
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 in the future or not. To have a better salary it's not
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 what you get in college but it is about hard
work
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 and perseverance. I personally disagree with
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 notion.
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, when a kid choose his major in the educational institution not just because he wants to have a good income in his
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 but because
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 his passion and dream.
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, a student wants to get arts but because nursing is in demand and you will get paid higher, he rather choose that major
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 of what is he really like.
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, in a long run, if you don't like your major you're taking, when you face challenges, you will simply give up, you will not persevere because
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 not your passion, though it will give you a good salary in the future it will not give you joy.
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, hard
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 is the key to success and better income or salary. It is not because you came from a
university
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 or have a major but because you
work
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 hard. Many successful individuals do not have a major to any
university
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, for ,example Jack Ma, is one of the
billionaire
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 in the world, he attains that success because he believed in himself and
work
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 hard to get his dream. Getting a major in a
university
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 is one of the steps to your
career
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. To conclude, choosing a major in a
university
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 is crucial but it does not mean it will give you assurance for a high-paying
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, hard
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 and perseverance is the important factor of everything.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • university major
  • high paying careers
  • long-term satisfaction
  • fulfillment
  • factors
  • potential
  • income
  • passion
  • interest
  • success
  • job satisfaction
  • transferable skills
  • balance
  • personal interests
  • financial stability
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