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Nowadays, it is more convenient and easier for people to travel to other countries. Is this a positive or negative development?

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There is no doubt that that
traveling
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 to other places is more comfortable and very simple for
people
 these days,
however
,not all the effects of
this
 phenomenon have been positive,
although
 there are certainly some advantages. In my point of view,
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 think it has both advantages and disadvantages. There are several drawbacks of moving from
country
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one country
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 to other countries. A common criticism of the
comforty
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comfort
comforts
 of
traveling
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 during these days is that it becomes more expensive and costs
alot
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a lot
 of money for transportation, booking hotels, and buying the tickets.
This
 means that poor
people
 could not feel the
comforty
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comfort
comforts
 of
traveling
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. Another negative aspect can be that
people
 would take the advantage of comfortable
traveling
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 for immigration.
For instance
, according to a recent study, it showed that the
more easy
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 for
people
 to travel is, the more the number of immigration increases. In spite of these negative effects,
however
, the
comforty
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comfort
comforts
 of
traveling
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 has brought important benefits as well. One
such
 advantage is that
people
 could travel for tourism anytime and anywhere. Another positive effect can be that
people
 could discover and visit various
of
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countries using different kinds of transportation.
In addition
, it is
also
 easy for individuals to pay money without confusion. A particularly good example here is that
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 latest statistics discovered that the percentage of peoples' happiness increased because of moving to different places. To sum up, while there are some obvious drawbacks of
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 for being easy and convenient, it has
also
 brought us many benefits at the same time.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Advancements in transportation
  • Cultural curiosity
  • Economic reasons
  • Globalization
  • Educational opportunities
  • Digital nomadism
  • Healthcare tourism
  • Tourism industry growth
  • Personal development
  • Interconnectedness
  • Higher living standards
  • Remote work
  • Broaden their horizons
  • Affordable travel
  • Medical treatments
  • Global perspective
  • Air travel options
  • Cuisines
  • Lifestyles
  • Job opportunities
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