Using a computer everyday can have more negative than positive effect on young children To what extent do you agree and disagree with this opinion ?

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has become
neccessity
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necessity
necessary
for today's generation, without
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use
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the use
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of technology it is almost impossible to complete everyday tasks. Operating
computers
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daily could cause
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a dangerous
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impact on growing
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rather than providing benefit. I agree with
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point to some extent, as using
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have both pros and cons,
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following
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Firstly
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, in
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modern era of technology daily
use
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of
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computer
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a computer
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is almost unavoidable because
kids
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are getting
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homework
, school assignments and
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other
academic activities that can be completed on systems only.
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in the pandemic situation due to COVID-19 and lockdown students are getting online distance learning and
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not possible without
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,
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the use
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of
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a computer
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at
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an early
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age provides many skills
to
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young
kids
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that will surely help them to
acheive
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achieve
their goals easily in
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competetive
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competitive
society.
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, it is not difficult for children now even in developing countries like Pakistan to communicate effectively by email,
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which
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was not possible without
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the use
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of
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, there are so many disadvantages of
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an early
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age like
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can reach every site available on
internet
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the internet
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that is
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not appropriate for them, that can lead to so many social
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problems
.
Cyber bullying
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is one of the hot
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these days due to
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range
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of
computers
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by
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, frequent usage of
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and other
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specially
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for video games can have many injurious health
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effects
, including
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eyesight
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problem, spine
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issues
due to
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posture for
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time.
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, one research published in world
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reported that more than 70% of children who are using
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more than 6 hours per day are suffering from spine problems. To conclude
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there should be some check and balance by parents and teachers as well in relation to
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use
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the use
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of
computers
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by young children. There must be some fixed time allocated for
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the screen
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like not more
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then
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three hours per day with proper seating position and lighting around. Sites that are not suitable for
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by putting passwords
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cyber safety
  • screen time
  • cognitive development
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • social isolation
  • digital literacy
  • interactive learning
  • virtual communication
  • physical well-being
  • academic performance
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