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Nowadays, the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the type of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

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A certain segment of society believes that the evolution in the automation sector has influenced our interactions in a bad way, and I fully agree with that the
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 of the latest gadgets which we are using these days to socializing had brought numerous worse effects.
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, with the arrival of social media
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 as Facebook, Instagram, Snapchat and so on, people like to chat or call via their smartphones and laptops due to the fact that these days individuals do not like to talk with one another face to face. To illustrate that,
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 year a survey was conducted by the Discovery channel which states that 75% of people do not want to engage in real talk
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 trend is more widespread in western nations in comparison to Asian countries.
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, Researchers mentioned that the new generation has lost their ability to interact naturally which is not a good sign of a healthy society. Another point to be considered is that numerous adults prefer to play games on their high-tech gaming consoles in their free time because of that numerous persons do not know have any knowledge about their neighbours. To cite an instance, a newspaper says that in U.S.A 60 per cent crowd is unable to recognize the faces of their neighbours. Ten years ago, everyone was using their free time to interact with their neighbours by visiting parks but now the time has changed. To conclude, according to the surveys and studies, technology has afflicted our social interactions considerably, of course, in a bad manner. In my perspective, we should try to reduce the usage of social media as well as various smart tech gadgets and will try to collaborate naturally.
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