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Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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The legality of abortion is an
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ambivalent
 topic nowadays.
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 public opinion on the matter is truly divided. We can't find a middle ground in which we are all happy with the decisions made. A group of people with a more conservative background think that abortion should be
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forbidden
. They believe that only God should be the one to choose if the fetus lives or not. It can affect
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psychologically
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 couples and more important women,
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 are the main carrier of the creature. Could lead society towards
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domination
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 by breaking the family as the cornerstone of society.
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, we have more progressive thinkers that believe only the baby's carrier should be the one entitled to decide
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 to keep it or not. They justify their argument
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 cases in which the person has been abused and raped. Another idea is that the fetus can compromise the mother's life.
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 medical advances can give us a very clear idea
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 the child will
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 with problems or not, so we can decide if we want to deal with that in the future. I think people should respect life over all things. We are not supposed to choose who lives or dies and we can't weight a living life with one that hasn't lived yet. If there is a justification for
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abortion that goes beyond the selfishness of the individual, I'd agree with it.
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