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Modern children are suffering from the diseases that were once considere to be meant for adults only. Obesity is a major disease prevalent among children .What are its causes and what solutions can be offered

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New generation
children
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 are increasingly facing health issues across all nations. Diseases like
obesity
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 which were once seen in adults are quite common in modern
children
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 these days.
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 a global problem.
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 of all, changing
food
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 habits & preparation method is one of the reasons for
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 issue ,
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food
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 preferences have changed and dependency on restaurants has increased due to the time constraints, as both parents are working. Instant meals, processed tin
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 and
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 an online delivery option at convenience pushed people away from traditional homely and healthy eating habits. As globalisation increased, restaurants started offering multi cuisines and
children
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’s love for foreign
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 has increased.
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 junk meals and carbonated drinks have put
children
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 on
obesity
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. While consuming them, it is necessary that
children
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 should have physical activities. But due to technological advancement, they are addicted to gadgets and confined
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indoors with less or no physical activities.
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 the solutions that can be offered;
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, follow
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traditional healthy eating and preparation habits which will limit
obesity
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 to an extent. In the
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 place, parents should reduce the dependency on restaurants and provide healthy home-made snacks.
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children
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 should be given awareness about
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 that contain preservatives/additives, high calorie and sugar. They should
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 be taught
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 natural habitat eating according to their climate.
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 scheduling a fixed time every day for outdoor activities will help to avoid a sedentary lifestyle.
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,
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the government
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 should
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 take measures through
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 safety standards authority and can impose
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a tax
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 on junk
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 so as to limit their intake in
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, encourage schools to introduce sports incentive thereby motivating kids to participate As the saying goes “we are what we eat”,
children
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 should be given awareness on how
food
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 and health
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 interconnected in lifestyle diseases like
obesity
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 and others along with
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the importance
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 of physical fitness. Because
children
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 are assets of a nation and our future citizens to build a healthy society & nation.
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