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Some of people believe it is better for youngsters to learn a new language at primary school rather than at secondary school. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

One of conflict of opinions in bringing up youngsters is when they going to learn a new
language
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 at earlier
ages
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 in primary
school
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 or at teenager
ages
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 in secondary
school
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. In
this
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 essay, I am going to clarify the benefits and drawbacks of
this
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 belief. Nowadays most of the kindergarten put in their curriculum teaching the
children
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 a foreign
language
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. Because in
this
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 age the brain of
children
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 was fresh, empty and steady to receive and save all information around them
such
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 as their native
language
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, voices and all things their families teaching them their ability to store and restore easily help them to learn more than one
language
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 (mother
language
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) with the perfect pronunciation due to strong listening skill.
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, in secondary
school
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 adult was responsible for studying a lot of courses and learning new things or skills
besides
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 of
time
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 table for each course limited
time
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 that’s mean that the
time
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 of study day divided into the 6 or 7 courses
on the contrary
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 in primary
school
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time
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 table contains just 3 or 4 subjects at most. So, the ability of their brains spilt in different things in teenagers
ages
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. All in all, I am totally agreeing with the opinion of learning
children
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 a new
language
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 at the earlier
ages
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 because it leads to bringing up a child to adult with valuable thing to himself as a foreign
language
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 or more than one, which something grateful, hope all families understand the idea and know that the best investment ever in their
children
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.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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