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The Internet is now used all around the world as a source of information and communication. However, its often controversial, so many people think it needs to be controlled. Others believe there should be no interference whatsoever. Discuss both points of view, and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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 is a platform which
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information
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 and communication
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all around the world.
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 controversial because many
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 suggest that
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 should be controlled, while
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 that
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 should be free to
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 and communication technology. Nowadays,
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 a tool to find every
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people
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 easier to find what
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 can be dangerous if it does not have any restriction.
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 has so many dangerous webs,
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 by everyone.
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 is used as a filter, so
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. There
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 so many negative impacts if
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 our children can be brainwash from the negative content that
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 and they can act weird or doing sex as an impact from watch
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,
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 need to be free to
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need
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 an arm and leg cost to use.
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, based on my experience, I felt hard to found a journal
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which
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information
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 because the
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 and it made me struggle to find an appropriate source. In conclusion,
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 must provide
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free
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,
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 but must have a filter to avoid
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access
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 negative content.

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