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Write about the following topic: Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The world
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World
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 poverty is a universal problem. It has devastating effects on poor
countries
 but
also
 on rich
countries
. In the following essay, I will argue that the reason for destitution is
lack
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the lack
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 of resources and the solution will be
the
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help from world organizations.
Firstly
, as the indigent
countries
 do not have enough resources, the industry in the nations is difficult to grow.
Furthermore
, the population is exploding in most developing
countries
, the supplies are easily run out.
For example
, in Nigeria, because of
harmfully
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the harmfully
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 hot climate, the crops
are not grow
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are not growing
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 well.
However
, the population of the nation is rocketing;
thus
, many people suffer from
severe
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a severe
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 famine. In
this
 way, the underprovision of supplies leads to make the nation poor.
Secondly
, the breakthrough of
the
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penury would be
the
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support from international institutions. Since those are established to make the world a better place, they have
responsible
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responded
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to
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for
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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