The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

After the introduction of different social
media
platforms
and excess use of those
platforms
have changed the way
people
used to interact. Many
people
argue that it is disadvantageous as there is less face to face communication;
however
, I am of an opinion that advantages are far higher than
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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. One of the disadvantage
people
often
debate
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that
now a days
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there are less close relations among
people
as almost everyone prioritizes online
platforms
over friends and relatives.
Which
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is very true if compared
this
generation to the generation of
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decades back. In
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90’s
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there used to be manual work everywhere and
people
had ample time to spend good moments with family members.
However
, with the passage of time, preferences have changed a lot.
In contrast
, I believe that social
media
has provided convenience to everyone which leads to efficiency in doing different works. Many
people
who need products that are not available within
country
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can get those products from abroad within no time. There is a group called Packr on Facebook. Users of social
media
usually order clothes and perfumes in that group which are
otherwise
not available in Pakistan
such
as Zara and H&M. Amazon
also
doesn’t provide delivery services to Pakistan. So, social
media
platforms
provide greater convenience to
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users. Another compelling reason for holding my position is that
,
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social
media
has provided opportunities to many
people
. It
become
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a place where
people
earn their livelihood by showcasing different skills.
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, a small computer shop that was only known to the
people
of its surrounding is delivering products throughout
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Pakistan. It became possible only because of his wise use of social
media
platforms
.
As a result
, he has expanded his business to a greater extent. To sum up, no doubt if social
media
has changed the way of interaction between
people
, it has
also
provided benefits to
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people
such
as convenience and different opportunities.
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