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Water scarcity is a serious problem in many countries. What are the causes of this？And what solutions can be done by individuals and the government?

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Freshwater has always been limited in most developing nations because of various reasons
such
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 as over-utilisation or industrial
waste
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.
However
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,
water
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 scarcity can be mitigated by taking a few steps like forging recycling
plants
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 and avoiding lavish
use
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 of
water
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 in the houses. There are multifarious causes behind the shortage of
water
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.
First
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 of all, industries dump their raw
waste
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 materials directly in the rivers or closely located
water
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 bodies. In
this
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 way, the
water
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get
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 contaminated with
toxic
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a toxic
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 combination of chemicals and sewerage,
as a result
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,
fresh
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freshwater
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water
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 deprivation profused in nearby communities.
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, with an increase in the population, the demand
of
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for
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water
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also
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 proliferated
from
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 the
last
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 few decades.
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 can be
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an other
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another
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 cause of
water
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 shortage around the world.
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, it is not a major cause, but the careless
use
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 of
water
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 in the residential areas has exacerbated
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problem
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. Challenging though, the
problem
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 is, there must be done something to cripple it.
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, the government should
built
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the
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apply
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water
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 treatment
plants
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 for companies to recycle their
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waste
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wastewater
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water
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 and untreated raw sewerage materials. By
this
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, the polluted
water
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 can be used by the industries or neighbourhood again for their daily work.
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,
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problem
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 of
water
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 shortage can be cured
at
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to
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 a greater extent. A good illustration is Singapore, where
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water
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the water
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 recycling unit is completing the demands of locals by treating the
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waste
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wastewater
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water
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 produced from the industries.
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, the government should
also
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 develop reservoirs, lakes or ponds to store
water
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 for the future.
For instance
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, India and China have formed various artificial bodies to save themselves from drought. From the individual's perspective, they should form
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water
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 harvesting tank in their backyards to store rainwater, which they can
use
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 for cleaning, washing and for other household chores.
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, they should try to avoid unnecessarily
use
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 of
water
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 to yield
a
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 desired outcome. To conclude, even though,
the
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apply
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water
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 scarcity is a major issue around the globe because of the over-population or lavish
water
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use
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,
this
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problem
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 can be resolved by taking a few steps like
water
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 conservation, developing
water
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plants
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 and harvesting
plants
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.

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