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Some people argue that space exploration has had more to do with national pride than international effort. To what extent do you agree with? How do you think space exploration will change in the future? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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In the
last
 century
space
 exploration has been developing at a rapid pace. One part of the community feels like what really is pushing authorities to make a growth in the sphere of
space
 are solutions for global issues, while
other
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 half believes
this
 is due to the competition between countries. From my perspective of view, new findings related to galactic exploration has always seen as
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national pride.
To begin
 with, nations try to impress and gain respect from other states by gaining more knowledge related to the galactic. It was the superior
space
 technology and achievements, which defined the country as a leading one.
For instance
, a few decades back, there was a “cold war” between USSR and America, which made the
first
 country launch
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first
 rocket and it was Americans who made the landing on the Moon for the
first
 time.
However
, there is no doubt that countries are trying hard to solve the problem of overpopulation by sending expeditions to other planets. A lot of well-known scientists from all around the world are cooperating with the same goal, to find an alternative place where people can expand
further
. With
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 demand for the sake of reasons above,
space
 development is inevitable. In the future I think, the
practice
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 of travelling outside the Earth will become commonplace and will likely solve problems of today. To conclude, I feel like the country`s
self-achievements
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 are more valued
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 than an international effort. Advanced technology will
also
 make these expeditions much easier as
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time goes by.
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