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Some modern artist receive huge sums of money for the things they create while others struggle to survive Governments should take steps to resolve this unfair situation To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Some modern artist receive huge sums of money for the
things
 they create while others struggle to survive Governments should take steps to resolve
this
 unfair situation To what extent do you agree or disagree It is believed that nowadays, many scientific experts
is
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 paid
a huge sums
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huge sums
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 of money for creating
things
, meanwhile, others have difficulties getting by. Some state that
government
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the government
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 ought to address measures to balance
this
 unjustified circumstance. From my perspective, I strongly agree with the statement given.
This
 essay tends to elaborate thoroughly
this
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 matter in the following paragraphs.
First
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 to mention, some scientists may have high income for making peril
things
 which can be a huge threat to other people or even to other countries
such
 as
deadly
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 biological weapon or nuclear bomb.
Therefore
,
government
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the government
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 should have a strict policy to evaluate the quality and the benefit given by each
products
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 created before they come into the market.
In addition
, taxes on those products would be appropriate so that the federal agency is able to take control of the price and to prevent
things
 might cost unexpectedly higher than
its
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 true value.
Secondly
, a lot of brilliant haven’t had an actual chance to prove themselves seriously .
Therefore
,
government
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the government
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 should have more policies and create funds to encourage the growth and development in many scientific aspects, organize more competitions ( national and international) in order to not only to provide the income for many experts in
this
 realm but
also
 to give them the opportunities to contribute to the country’s wealth and prosperity. To conclude, science is an aspect which is really crucial to human daily life, without its product, people can hardly survive until
this
 day.
However
, there is still an unfair situation happening between scientists these days which requires governmental solutions.
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