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Some people think media should be allowed to publicize information on someone’s private life. Some others believe that media should be regulated in this regard. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answers and relevant examples.

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The
competiton
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competition
 of journalism in today's time have made journalists
to
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constantly hunt for new and exciting
news
 to allure
people
 towards their
news
 channels or social pages. Publishing
news
 and articles on someone's private
life
 is a crucial matter and has to be dealt
sensitively
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.
Firstly
, journalists must have
the
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 keen understanding
on
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of
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 what to publish on their channels or newspapers. Private matters
such
 as
a
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holiday trips, throwing huge events and buying new properties is not that awkward because these type of
news
 can encourage
people
 in progressing in their lives. As many
people
 tend to follow many celebrities lifestyle and try to reach
upto
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up to
 their levels.
Furthermore
, sometimes publishing articles on private
life
 can help them gain fame and stardom in their respective fields.
However
,
this
 can
also
 have
negative
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 impact on their careers at certain times.
Secondly
, as previously mentioned journalists must have
good
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 sense of publishing
news
, many times they show inappropriate contents about the personal lives of
people
. Nowadays some of the much personal matters are shown in media.
For example
,
news
 about female celebrities in regard to their pregnancy, when are they delivering babies, about their divorces are considered inappropriate. According to
me
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, telecasting
these
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 type of
news
 can negatively impact
the
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society. To recapitulate,
news
are
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the
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a
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 vital part
in
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of
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 everyone's
life
 as they help us remain cognizant
about
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 the world around us.
However
, there must be strict regulation in putting up content about anyone's private
life
 and permission must be
seeked
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sought
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 before disclosing the content.
Also
, it is the duty of every individual to crosscheck any information prior to forwarding with
the
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 sense of sensitivity and responsibility towards an individual.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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