At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantage?

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DAY AND AGE, THE NUMBER OF OLDER

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HAS DECREASED AS OPPOSED TO YOUNG

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. I BELIEVE THAT THE BENEFITS OF HAVING MORE YOUNG ADULTS ARE OF THE UTMOST IMPORTANCE BASED ON PROGRESS-ORIENTED GOVERNMENTS AND A BETTER ALLOCATING OR RESOURCES REGARDLESS OF THE SITUATION. ONE REASON IN FAVOUR OF HAVING MORE YOUNG ADULTS IN OUR SOCIETY IS THAT IT MIGHT CONTRIBUTE TO THE GROWTH OF THE ECONOMY. YOUNG

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ARE ACTIVELY WORKING AND PAYING THEIR TAXES WHICH ENABLES THE GOVERNMENT TO ALLOCATE

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MONEY IN ORDER TO SOLVE

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’S NEEDS.

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, SOME YOUNG

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HAVE NO EXPERIENCE SO, THEIR INCOMES IS NOT GOOD ENOUGH AS OPPOSED TO OLDER ADULTS WHO MAY HAVE ACHIEVED SUCCESS AND GOT RELEVANT POSITIONS ON THE GLOBAL MARKET. BUT, YET AGAIN, EVEN THOUGH THERE ARE SOME OLDER

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CONTRIBUTING WITH OUR ECONOMY,I BELIEVE THAT THE MORE YOUNG

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A COUNTRY HAS, THE MORE REVENUE A

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WILL GET. ANOTHER ADVANTAGE IS THAT THE EXPENDITURE OF THE GOVERNMENT WOULD DECREASE, IT THERE WAS A FEW OLDER

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. NOWADAYS, IT IS COSTLY FOR THE GOVERNMENT TO ALLOCATE FUNDING WHEN

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BECOME OLD . THE OLD USUALLY SUFFER FROM HEALTH CONDITIONS

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AS HEART ATTACKS AND CANCER AND MUST ACCESS TO THE HEALTHCARE FACILITIES IN ORDER TO BE TREATED.

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, SOME CAN BUY A INSURE POLICY HEALTH BECAUSE IT PROVIDES THE INSURED WITH A BETTER SERVICE IN TERMS OF THE AVAILABILITY OF HIGH STANDARDS FACILITIES AND OPPORTUNE MEDICAL ATTENTION BUT ONLY A FEW CAN AFFORD IT . SO, AGAIN, I FEEL THAT IF THERE ARE FEWER OLDER

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IN A SOCIETY , AUTHORITIES CAN SAVE MONEY AND

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, ALLOCATE

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FOR OTHER FIELD LIKE EDUCATION OR INSTANCE. TO SUM UP,

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SOME

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THINK THAT A SOCIETY HAS FEWER OLDER

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CAN NOT BE ADVANTAGEOUS , IN MY OPINION , THE ADVANTAGES ARE MORE IMPORTANT THAN DRAWBACKS GIVEN THAT THE EVER-INCREASING NUMBER OF YOUNG

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WILL HELP GOVERNMENTS ACHIEVE THEIR GOALS , ECONOMY WISE.

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Grammatical Range: 8.0

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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantage?

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