At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantage?

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THIS

DAY AND AGE, THE NUMBER OF OLDER

PEOPLE

HAS DECREASED AS OPPOSED TO YOUNG

PEOPLE

. I BELIEVE THAT THE BENEFITS OF HAVING MORE YOUNG ADULTS ARE OF THE UTMOST IMPORTANCE BASED ON PROGRESS-ORIENTED GOVERNMENTS AND A BETTER ALLOCATING OR RESOURCES REGARDLESS OF THE SITUATION. ONE REASON IN FAVOUR OF HAVING MORE YOUNG ADULTS IN OUR SOCIETY IS THAT IT MIGHT CONTRIBUTE TO THE GROWTH OF THE ECONOMY. YOUNG

PEOPLE

ARE ACTIVELY WORKING AND PAYING THEIR TAXES WHICH ENABLES THE GOVERNMENT TO ALLOCATE

THIS

MONEY IN ORDER TO SOLVE

PEOPLE

’S NEEDS.

NEVERTHELESS

, SOME YOUNG

PEOPLE

HAVE NO EXPERIENCE SO, THEIR INCOMES IS NOT GOOD ENOUGH AS OPPOSED TO OLDER ADULTS WHO MAY HAVE ACHIEVED SUCCESS AND GOT RELEVANT POSITIONS ON THE GLOBAL MARKET. BUT, YET AGAIN, EVEN THOUGH THERE ARE SOME OLDER

PEOPLE

CONTRIBUTING WITH OUR ECONOMY,I BELIEVE THAT THE MORE YOUNG

PEOPLE

A COUNTRY HAS, THE MORE REVENUE A

CONTRY

Correct your spelling

COUNTRY

WILL GET. ANOTHER ADVANTAGE IS THAT THE EXPENDITURE OF THE GOVERNMENT WOULD DECREASE, IT THERE WAS A FEW OLDER

PEOPLE

. NOWADAYS, IT IS COSTLY FOR THE GOVERNMENT TO ALLOCATE FUNDING WHEN

PEOPLE

BECOME OLD . THE OLD USUALLY SUFFER FROM HEALTH CONDITIONS

SUCH

AS HEART ATTACKS AND CANCER AND MUST ACCESS TO THE HEALTHCARE FACILITIES IN ORDER TO BE TREATED.

HOWEVER

, SOME CAN BUY A INSURE POLICY HEALTH BECAUSE IT PROVIDES THE INSURED WITH A BETTER SERVICE IN TERMS OF THE AVAILABILITY OF HIGH STANDARDS FACILITIES AND OPPORTUNE MEDICAL ATTENTION BUT ONLY A FEW CAN AFFORD IT . SO, AGAIN, I FEEL THAT IF THERE ARE FEWER OLDER

PEOPLE

IN A SOCIETY , AUTHORITIES CAN SAVE MONEY AND

AS A RESULT

, ALLOCATE

THIS

FOR OTHER FIELD LIKE EDUCATION OR INSTANCE. TO SUM UP,

ALTHOUGH

SOME

PEOPLE

THINK THAT A SOCIETY HAS FEWER OLDER

PEOPLE

CAN NOT BE ADVANTAGEOUS , IN MY OPINION , THE ADVANTAGES ARE MORE IMPORTANT THAN DRAWBACKS GIVEN THAT THE EVER-INCREASING NUMBER OF YOUNG

PEOPLE

WILL HELP GOVERNMENTS ACHIEVE THEIR GOALS , ECONOMY WISE.

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Grammatical Range: 8.0

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