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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people's lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities.

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It is always debatable that which
age
 of
life
 cycle is the most joyful. A number of people believe that people who are grown up are the happiest and others think that childhood was the best time. In my opinion, the teenage days are the most cheerful days of
life
. Childhood years are the days when there is no financial burden.
In other words
,
parents
 are responsible for the nourishment of a child and have the onus of fulfilling the demand of their young one.
For instance
, when I was a teenager, my
parents
 had to pay for my education fee, books and clothes.
Besides
, they
also
 had to pay for my demanded toys.
Therefore
, I was able to live freely without stressing about the cost of those materials. Overall, young
age
 is considered the golden phase of
life
.
On the other hand
, others have a view that adult
life
 is far more enjoyable than formative years. They think that because they are able to live independently without being caged by their
parents
. It can be a reason that they do not like restrictions, which were applied earlier when they were toddlers because now they are earning a handsome salary and can feed themselves. Many adults,
for example
, leave their
parents
 after the
age
 of eighteen as they pay their rent and wants to party with their peers.
That is
 why they have
this
 thought that adult
age
 being more enjoyable. In conclusion, I believe that formative years is most enjoyable because there are no financial burdens on
the
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adolescence
  • fulfillment
  • responsibilities
  • exploration
  • long-term goals
  • sense of stability
  • carefree
  • contentment
  • well-being
  • life stage
  • unique opportunities
  • deep satisfaction
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