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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

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Dear Sir, I am writing to let you know that I have some problems with the room arrangement. I have recently been assigned room 309 on the second floor in Kalpana hostel. As you know,
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 is a double sharing accommodation and my roommate is from the Pharmacy course. My roommate has 4 days of online classes and I do a part-time job from 9 am to 1 pm at Deloitte. Certainly, we are facing an issue with our schedule as I have to attend office meetings and she has to attend the lectures which is causing me difficulty in working and
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 bothering my schedule of study. I am unable to pay attention to my work and become cautious about speaking and concentrating. To accommodate it, I have to spend longer time in the evening which has disturbed my routine of study as well. I would request you if you can make some arrangements to provide me with a single-seater room. Looking forward to
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 faithfully, Tanya Luthra

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task achievement
In terms of task response, ensure that all aspects of the prompt are fully addressed. Elaborate on the specific problems encountered and how they impact your studies, providing clear examples.
coherence cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, maintain a clear and logical structure throughout the letter. While the main ideas are somewhat clear, the transition between paragraphs could be smoother.
coherence cohesion
To improve greeting and closing conventions, it is useful to match the level of formality throughout the letter. While the closing is suitably formal, consider starting with 'Dear Accommodation Officer' to consistently adhere to the formal tone.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodation officer
  • roommate
  • share a room
  • living arrangement
  • difficult to work
  • noise levels
  • study environment
  • privacy concerns
  • alternative accommodation
  • single room
  • academic performance
  • well-being
  • respectfully request
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